Bill “Boss” Ryan needs to go back to grammar school. Either that, or he needs to hire yet another staff specialist to clean up his syntax.
The chairman of the Westchester County recently issued a statement celebrating Gov. David Paterson’s announcement about a $500,000 affordable housing grant.
Not to be picky, but that first sentence (in bold) had us scratching our heads. It suggests that the chairman of the board is, himself, the affordable housing in question.
“As Chairman of the County Board, affordable housing for working families and seniors has been a priority. These housing rehabilitation grants from the state will ensure that low-income individuals, seniors and people with disabilities will not be locked out of the American dream of living in a home of their own.”
The “As chairman” beginning to the press release is boilerplate pol speak and a little pompous. It reminds me of the mayor of Munchkin Land who summons his mighty authority by declaring, “As mayor of this city…”
The Boss can keep that beginning. But here’s a suggested change which I present free of charge.
“As Chairman of the County Board, I’ve always made affordable housing for working families and seniors a priority.”“